Friday, January 08, 2010

Muscle-less




Just a moment more and shall be done
Have sat too long on this muse, lonesome
Inspirations dead, muscles lagged
Had to peel off my skin and the fat

Cured and curried, bottled with rum
Surprisingly it melted, now feeling numb

Intoxicated, unmatched is your love
Bundled, twiddled, slowly I wrote
Ghazals, poems, text and prose
Something balmy to augment flow

Wrote about fire, charred my soul
Squashed, smashed under heart-ached glow
Scratched the pen to write folklore
But, now I am done, can write no more

I give up, I want my muscles back
To give the shape to my skinny self

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33 comments:

  1. Can you hold you own with words Pushpee. A very good poem. Loved it !

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  2. nice poem... gr8 use of words!

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  3. Gr8 poem...I loved the way u used ur words

    Shahid

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  4. Loved the post simply superb are the right words to describe the poem :)

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  5. well expressed... beautifully penned...

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  6. Really good poem. Nice flow!

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  7. nice poem...

    :D

    Cheers,
    SiD

    Sidoscope
    The science of stupidity!!!

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  8. Beautifully expressed!! :)
    Cheers :)

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  9. It felt nice to read, the rhyming words and all, but honestly I didn't quite get the gist of it. No matter how simple the poem is, I can't understand that easily. Childhood problem, you see. :(
    Will read it again later to understand properly. :)
    All the best!

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  10. It was a nice post. Enjoyed reading the poem. :)

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  11. Thank you Madhu, Saurab, megha shahid,harsha rajlakshmi,dreamer, sid,Tavisha, Shilpa, Karthik, netra

    Glad you liked it….I enjoyed writing it too…

    :))

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  12. Hello Pushpee :) I love poetry and I love the fact that you have written it with all your heart. Love gone wrong really takes away not just the muscles but the warmth that envelopes the soul! Good one! Good luck with BATOM 6!

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  13. Very nice! I could not participate because of some crazy schedule at work, but if I had, this was somewhat similar to what I had in mind!
    You have lovely way with words..!:)

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  14. Pushpee I loved the rhyming of words very much! Its a great poem :)

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  15. Beautiful and Creative!

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  16. So many feelings in very less words...Nice poem!

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  17. hey....loved reading it.....intersting use of words...but am not sure how to interpret it...
    do give my blog a visit sometime...
    i write at http://theoxymoronworld.blogspot.com

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  18. lovely poem indeed...

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  19. Came in for seconds :-) .


    Cured and curried, bottled with rum
    Surprisingly it melted, now feeling numb

    and

    Wrote about fire, charred my soul


    I am numb at how well you manage to express it ...

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  20. Thank you sooo much Raksha, justanother, preeti, neeraj, pra, oxymoron, geeta and Madhu...

    deeply honored Madhi..thank y soo much for ur second visit and adding more words...glad u liked it..
    :)

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  23. Loved it!
    very well penned :)

    Good luck for BATOM6!

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  24. To express a feeling through words, and to get it felt right by the reader is an art, and you are so good at it. Your poems are an amazing read.

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  25. Serene and soothing.....
    quite expressive :)

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  26. Anonymous1:24 AM

    Nautral poet for sure!
    Brilliant use of words!
    :)

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  27. Thank you soooooo much.. gkam, tuppence, mahesh, yemiledu ...for your kind words... :)

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  28. Anonymous4:16 AM

    A nice play with words, I must say. Beautiful self expression.
    A wholesome read.

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  29. Hey

    What is this Blog-a ton?? sounds interesting!!

    and loved the poem n the pic... free flow of words..almost like a story unfolding slowly...!!

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  30. Thanks Aaarti..blog-a-ton is the writing exercise done by bloggers on one theme..u blog n ur ow page and just send the link...its fun to read different ppl all blogging on same theme..u must take part in this event..i will sent u the link...:))

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